Jasmine Hart

I like it, especially the last stanza. I'd suggest laying some of the lines out differently though; "By someone else For even I Am not really sure that I know ...

Hey Kit. The first three lines are great. I think the fourth is a little weak. I'm not sure about using "river" for blue, as you've already used it for ...

I love it, and your layout is great. I agree with whence about "picture perfect" though. I'm not really sure about "a bond of paper" though, it seemed a little ...

I'm not quite sure about this. I liked from "Man, his face set hard...family again". I liked the emotion there. I think you kind of flip between your registers a ...

I love it, but I don't liek the way you said "Hopefully not, cuz" as it seemed a bit too colloquial in relation to the rest of the poem. I'd ...

I like it, and I agree with kk and Kit. But I'm a bit unsure about the word "Little" at the end. I think I'd use something a bit stronger. ...

I think that was a little harsh. Stay with your theme, it's always best to write about what you want to write about, not what you think you should write ...

I can't believe you're 14!I thought you were older, you're wise beyond your years. I wasn't half as good as this when I was your age. You rock. I'd add ...

I thought it was great, but I'm not sure about the way you change your tenses, eg "leaned" and "drift" are in contrast, which I think makes it read a ...